Still, can't be too safe; register it with the Library of Congress or Writers Guild and you're golden.

Congrats swollen.

Now, let me offer my sincerest thoughts.

Any time you expose your ideas to a public site (like the one you mentioned here), Anyone can take it and run with it. If you don't care, fine.

But, if you plan to make a valid effort to do something with it, i.e.: screenplay, etc. then keep it to yourself and don't give it away to some website or some contest. It's an age old ploy to acquire peoples thoughts and ideas.

Of Course they wanted you to make changes...Their changes; which means once they acquire what they want, from you, the person doing all the work, it "becomes" theirs; or at least in their mind it does.

Forgive me for sounding defensive, mean, negative or anything of the sort, but it would kill me to see someone take advantage of a fellow horror lover in order to benefit for themselves.

...and that's My two sense.

Thanks Ace, I know what you mean. After going on a lot of fiction sites and e-zines it seems like there’s a lot of talent out there stuck in an abyss. I originally put it out there because it was just simple story and I craved feedback so I could improve. When she wanted me to make changes that made me question if I was even getting my basic point across it f’ed with my head. I am not writing to make any cash just hope someone reads it and likes it, its addictive when that happens.

Cap really summed up what was on the tip of my tongue when I posted this but was at a loss, which is she wanted to turn it into a Goosebumps episode. I wanted to write a simple but unsettling story about a person that meets an unstoppable force and their demise. No sense of hope or struggle just a vibe of helplessness and dread and I think that’s what I ended up with.

I don’t know if anyone saw my post above but a UK E-zine sent me an email today their putting it in their next issue. So someone did like it the way I liked it and I am a happy camper.

Now, let me offer my sincerest thoughts.

Any time you expose your ideas to a public site (like the one you mentioned here), Anyone can take it and run with it. If you don't care, fine.

But, if you plan to make a valid effort to do something with it, i.e.: screenplay, etc. then keep it to yourself and don't give it away to some website or some contest. It's an age old ploy to acquire peoples thoughts and ideas.

Of Course they wanted you to make changes...Their changes; which means once they acquire what they want, from you, the person doing all the work, it "becomes" theirs; or at least in their mind it does.

Forgive me for sounding defensive, mean, negative or anything of the sort, but it would kill me to see someone take advantage of a fellow horror lover in order to benefit for themselves.

...and that's My two sense.

Your characters should dictate -- advertently or inadvertently -- the course of your story.  You present an opposition/threat, and let you characters do what they would do in a given situation.  Maybe they'll run away and hide; maybe they'll stand frozen in fear; maybe they'll be aggressive and tackle the threat head on; maybe it'll take them some time to figure out exactly what to do, then will formulate a plan to deal with it.  You know -- that kind of thing.

My two cents, take them for what you will -- though keep in mind I'm a published writer and a purchased screenwriter, so -- yeah, I kind of know what I'm talking about.

It will be a couple of months before it comes out but I will post a link here when it does.

This is really great news to me so I wanted to share.

You both captured what I was thinking; “Goosebumps/ Tinny bopper” horror was the vibe I was getting too. 

Good story or not it helps me to know I did the right thing with it.