Horror Movies Forum - The Wish Box.

Re: The Wish Box.

dummy@example.com (The Creature) — Thu, 24 Nov 2011 05:18:33 +0000

Sweet story, Swollen. I thought it was really good, though I would also like to know a little more about Julie. Anyway, good job and keep writing!

Re: The Wish Box.

dummy@example.com (swollenguy) — Tue, 22 Nov 2011 22:09:39 +0000

Got some great feedback/posted comments today on this one.

Re: The Wish Box.

dummy@example.com (swollenguy) — Thu, 17 Nov 2011 17:04:00 +0000

Thanks guys!

It’s flash, so there is going to be stuff left for the imagination. I agree I should have added a little more on Julie and added some more suspense build up in the end.

Re: The Wish Box.

dummy@example.com (wolfman1959) — Wed, 16 Nov 2011 19:49:11 +0000

you always have a good flow to your stories Sam, and it holds you most of the way but i am the opposite to the undies doggy. i didn't like the ending much, leaves everything up in the air. just my opinion. That said you are still a talented writer.

Re: The Wish Box.

dummy@example.com (Underdog) — Wed, 16 Nov 2011 00:30:21 +0000

Good story, swollen. It has a good flow and is quite true that most people are never truly content. Which makes it easy to relate to for your readers. I also think you did a great job on the wording being very descriptive of the characters, surroundings, and emotions.
One thing I would have liked more attention to was; "when Julie stepped into the box, did she get her wish?" I can guess what her wish was though. Best of all, IMO, was the ending!

keep up the good work and thanks for sharing!!

The Wish Box.

dummy@example.com (swollenguy) — Tue, 15 Nov 2011 22:59:16 +0000

Let me know what you think.

http://theswollencorpse.blogspot.com/20 … h-box.html