After writing the VS matches I have been going back 3-4-5 times and editing a few things I thought could be improved on. As you pointed out; it's usually sooner- than later

So, with those words of wisdom;
" I'll try to be more patient before doing any correcting/editing."

Save me a good seat at the Emmy's! 

Just keep with it bro!  We'll hammer out some awesomeness in the end.  I got 2 editors on my side (Vamps and mom) plus Lon to work on our story.  Hell, I might even ask Ace to give some thoughts if he's free.

I do enjoy writing though. And appreciate any feedback/critiquing the more seasoned writers here can/will offer.

Those intro stories I've posted in the Battle Story Thread?  3rd or 4th revisions with Vamps giving them a look over.  I haven't even sent them to my mom yet (she's so hardcore she makes the Blue Book of Grammar cry). 

So you're doing fine.  Read my edited version in a day or two.  I'm not any great shakes, but I have probably written 5K pages worth of various stuff in my time.

Keep doing your thing, and in a year we'll have a NY Times bestseller on our hands!   Then the movie deal, and we all grab Emmy's in Hollywood, and live happily ever after.  (with monkeys)

By the way, I haven't thanked you recently for doing this.  Tre cool, my friend.

The results:

Predator: 1 Vote
Justified Votes: 0
Non-justified votes: 1 x 1 pt each = 1 pt
Total pts: 1

Rawhead Rex: 3 Votes
Justified Votes: 3 x 5 pts each = 15 pts
Total pts: 15

Winner: RAWHEAD REX

How I'd break it down:

Rawhead's eternal but can he be defeated in battle?  I think he could.  Being a creature from hell he'd be reborn again and come back, but he can be temporarily put down.  And I think Predator's the guy to do it.  With his arsenal, superhuman agility and electronic camouflage device, I think he could easily get the drop on King Rawhead.  He'd never keep Rex down permanently, but I do think he'd win every match-up.

My take: Predator wins.

About two and a half hours until voting for this round ends.  Get in while you can!

Rawhead lurks in the dark streets and alley ways, claiming three more innocent lives. All females. While devouring his last victim, Predator sees his chance. The element of surprise! One of the first lessons in hunting taught to the Yautjas. The Predator arms himself with his pointed spear, then launches his net gun at Rawhead. Rawhead, caught in the net, begins using his mighty hands to rip away the netting. Predator hurls his Naginata, and a few shurikens at Rawhed, all hitting their mark. Rawhead, not feeling any pain, goes into a frenzy of rage. A berserk-er! In a matter of seconds Rawhead is freed from the netting.

Rawhead leaps on top of the roof where, Predator stands. Predator does not flee, but stands proud. Ready to do battle! Rawhead grabs, Predator and attempts to maul him. The Predators armor withstands the strength of the mighty onslaught of blows by Rawhead. Predator hits a button on his wrist and is again cloaked. Predator dodges the lethal blows of Rawhead. Rawhead pauses, and is momentarily confused by the disappearance of his attacker. The Predator grabs another weapon from his vast selection. The combat stick that all Preadators are well versed in. He steps in closer, and shoves the combat stick deep into the bowels of Rawhead. Rawhead stumbles, not from the pain, but from the fury of the assault, which he has never known. The fury only strengthens Rawhead! He gets up from the ground and lunges. Attempting to grab anything that stands in his way. The predator side steps from the assault. Then launches another three shurikens. Rawhead pulls the shurikens from his body. Predator is now the one who is confused? Never has he witnessed any being withstand the multitude of weaponary, and lived.

Predator uncloaks himself to reveal, and confront the beast. Rawhead, lunges towards Predator. Predator does not try to avoid the physical attack. Pride has over taken the young Predator. Predator has decided to confront his prey, in arm-to-arm combat. Predator, is first to make contact. A mighty blow to the head sends Rawhead reeling back a good three feet. Rawhead, charges back at Predator. Rawhead, is able to strike a blow to the body of the Predator. Predator withdrawals, swallows his pride, realizing that  hand-to-hand combat will not defeat this opponent.

Predator arms himself with his most powerful weapon. The Plasma Gauntlet, imbedded in his gloved arm. A ray capable of obliterating a prehistoric Tyrannosaurus Rex. Predator, fires a bolt at Rawhead. A direct hit! Rawhead falls to the ground for the second time in battle. Not just stunned. This time from injury! Predator againg unleashes another bolt. And again... a direct hit! Rawhead remains on the floor, struggling to get up. Predator, approaches the stricken Rawhead.

Predator reaches for what he surmises to be his final weapon of assault. A, twin headed Glaive. The weapon of choice by his own clan,  personalized just for him by the elders. Predator heaves out a mighty roar. One that claims victory. Predator lifts up his Glaive...and thrusts it into the skull of Rawhead. A black ooze begins flowing from the head of Rawhead. Rawhead's body flails, then seizes. Predator, triumphantly retrieves his Gaive from the lifeless body.

Predator proudly summons the elder Predators. Notifying them of his victory. The young Predator turns to face the dead body of the once mighty demon. He raises both arms high into the night sky and speaks out a prayer of the Yaujta. A prayer that honors the fallen. Respectfully asking the Gods to take his dead opponent to a place where he will be recognized as a warrior. After one final word of praise, Predator bows his head, then kneels in silence for a few moments. " Kefcuiehbc... nc, dxhu bxueixbe fhiu ndhdtmrf, cnu cnu ndicb hrv nyd." * translated from the Yatja language; Predator, we have received your message, and are retrieving you soon." If the Predators could smile, this young triumphant one would.

As the Predator warrior awaits his return to the mother ship, his mind is able to relax. He looks to the sky, remembering other Yatja who have crossed into manhood, and the ultimate glory it will bestow upon him. He feels a warmth upon him. A warmth brought on by the euphoric feeling of triumph. Of glory. Of respect! Then the young hunter feels another sensation. A sharp pain!! Not of the mental sort, but physical pain. His body is swiftly lifted high off the ground. A massive arm protruding through his gut. He is dropped to the hard ground. Looking up he sees what he thought to be long dead. Rawhead Rex, stands before him! Predator futilely attempts to reach for a weapon of any sort. Rawhead, grabs the arm of the Predator and rips it off. Rawhead then reaches for the helmet of Predator, and pulls it off!  Predator begins gasping for air. The oxygen of Earth is toxic to their species. He is choking on poison. Rawhead Rex, takes predator out of his misery and suffering, by taking hold of it's head and with one hand, tearing it off the body.

Winner: Rawhead Rex.

I did more research on these two, than any other previous opponents. With R R, I wasn't able to gather much info, other than in role playing strengths. What I did gather was instrumental.

With Predator, there was a ton of info!

Based on what I gathered. It was a hard decision!

I gave the win to R R, because of a few key abilities: The ability to heal and is eternal. Two abilities the YOUNG Predator did not know of, or had simply forgotten!

Winner- Rawhead Rex

I would be honored! 

I'm still working on my analysis, bro. The drive out to the in-laws took a bit out of me, so I'll get it to you, well, actually today now.

I'm thinking of making you a human character in the battle story, some colleague of the main guy.   Maybe with a really smart dog (or would that be too cliched?)

So get to voting, dammit!  What, you think I post these things for my prostate health?

Yes.