Horror Movies Forum - or this

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dummy@example.com (DemonToSome) — Sat, 25 Aug 2012 06:54:18 +0000

oh no that guy is so swollen ....

hes gonna burst all over ya

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dummy@example.com (swollenguy) — Fri, 24 Aug 2012 07:26:45 +0000

added

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dummy@example.com (swollenguy) — Wed, 22 Aug 2012 08:25:09 +0000

added

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dummy@example.com (Ghostseeker) — Sat, 18 Aug 2012 05:27:47 +0000

I didn't see it before you added to it...but I like what I saw. Tense...in an anxious and uncomfortable way.

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dummy@example.com (swollenguy) — Sat, 18 Aug 2012 05:04:44 +0000

added see first post

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dummy@example.com (wolfman1959) — Fri, 17 Aug 2012 09:02:52 +0000

Swellie! you big girl's blouse! yeah keep going, your writing is good.

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dummy@example.com (LoudLon) — Fri, 17 Aug 2012 08:18:25 +0000

"deluded"..."banana-shaped"...

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dummy@example.com (azathoth) — Fri, 17 Aug 2012 08:09:41 +0000

"monkey" ... "ginormous"

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dummy@example.com (LoudLon) — Fri, 17 Aug 2012 08:08:00 +0000

Heh..."swollen"..."big"...

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dummy@example.com (UltraViolence) — Fri, 17 Aug 2012 07:56:34 +0000

Oh Swollen you big tease!

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dummy@example.com (swollenguy) — Fri, 17 Aug 2012 06:57:44 +0000

added see first post

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dummy@example.com (azathoth) — Fri, 17 Aug 2012 06:52:00 +0000

Swollen comes up with some nifty twists in his writing sometimes. I'd give him some time to unravel the story.

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dummy@example.com (LoudLon) — Fri, 17 Aug 2012 06:48:19 +0000

A guy manning up and stepping into hell to bravely accept what's coming to him? Yes, please.

Though I wonder at this point how much story you may have to tell; if this guy's already resigned himself to his fate and is willfully marching off to accept his punishment, it doesn't provide much an opportunity for conflict. Unless of course this is just a teaser that seques into a retelling of his backstory and committing his crime...?

Anyway, yes, interested. Keep going.

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dummy@example.com (A Lost Boy) — Fri, 17 Aug 2012 06:46:33 +0000

Yeah keep on!

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dummy@example.com (swollenguy) — Fri, 17 Aug 2012 06:44:49 +0000

its a snippet if you like i write more.