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Broken Not Dead

Have you looked in my eyes?
Seen the tears unshed?
My heart is not beating
It’s broken not dead.
My smile is fake, fake as fake can be
If you don’t know my pain you don’t know the real me.
Silent screams are all I hear when I sleep at night
That hides in the shadows when the sun shines bright
So many things that I hide from your eyes
With my fake smile and silly lies
You believe them because you see what you want me to be
But like I said you don’t know my pain, you don’t know the real me.

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revengebiteme wrote:

Broken Not Dead

Have you looked in my eyes?
Seen the tears unshed?
My heart is not beating
It’s broken not dead.
My smile is fake, fake as fake can be
If you don’t know my pain you don’t know the real me.
Silent screams are all I hear when I sleep at night
That hides in the shadows when the sun shines bright
So many things that I hide from your eyes
With my fake smile and silly lies
You believe them because you see what you want me to be
But like I said you don’t know my pain, you don’t know the real me.

that hit home revenge. very very good.

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^^thanks wolfman

what I used to be

Withered beauty
Broken soul
Precious secrets
The future holds

Looking in the mirror
Crying at what I see
Empty eyes
Of what I used to be

Running from something
I'm trying to find
That seems to be hiding
In the back of my mind

Forgotten hopes
Shattered dreams
Losing myself
In unheard screams.

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I love the title, broken not dead, but I think What I Used to be is the stronger poem, of course they both have such strong imagery attached to them and are both well written! You havea knack forthe good ol' dark stuff, I like that smile

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Thank you so much! I think What I used to be is one of my favorites (as well as my moms lol) I m big on imagry and I am always afraid people wont see what I do when I write so I am glad you liked them smile

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I Can't (Lose)

I’ve tried to suppress it all
Ignore it all along
Still fate has done me wrong
And I can’t keep me from my sorrow
Because I will always know

I can’t
I don’t want to lose another piece
I’ve failed to keep all of me
I can’t wish
In the end I will lose
Help me make it through

I must walk in the ashes
Of where I’m next to burn
Harder as time passes
To accept what I refuse to learn
I know you won’t comfort me, not now
But I will lose all I’ve earned

I can’t
I don’t want to lose another piece
I’ve failed to keep all of me
I can’t wish
In the end I will lose
Help me make it through

Give up all I’ve fought
Lay me down and leave it all
I don’t want to hurt
If I’m only made to fail
Then God you have prevailed

I can’t
I don’t want to lose another piece
I’ve failed to keep all of me
I can’t wish
In the end I will lose
Help me make it through

I can’t be for all
But you’re all so far gone
Every one
I can’t choose
Someone’s gonna lose

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I wrote some lyrics, roughly based around the movie "Cemetary man" and in Rob Zombie style.

Cemetary Man
~~~~~~~~~~~

I'm the Cemetary Man
Clean-sweep on a Devil's land
Got this gun in my hand
I PUT THE DEAD BACK TO SLEEP

Welcome to my Planet Dread
Psychos in your head
I am the killer of the living dead
AND THE SCREAMING DEMON

Tought me to be a man
Blood on chest
Gun in hand
Crusade in my Master's land
AND MY EYES ARE BLEEDING

I am the Cemetary Man
Gotta corpse in my breath
I am the bringer of death
AND I SHOOT TO KILL

Sometimes I need me a friend
Reach down into her grave
Not even Christ can be saved
AND SO I USE HER GOOD

Chorus:
I am - Cemetary Man
She'll never know
No, she'll never know
FUCKING NEC-RO-MANIAC

You know I am - Cemetary Man
Got skulls to smash
Teeth to grind
Dead lover to find
I WAS REJECTED BY HELL

* Insert awesome smokin' guitar solo here *

Chorus.

Last edited by The Creature (2011-11-13 09:48:47)

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The Creature wrote:

I wrote some lyrics, roughly based around the movie "Cemetary man" and in Rob Zombie style.

I like it. The one line rejected by god seems a little out of place.

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Thanks, Swollen. smile
And yes, perhaps I could switch that line around.

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I wrote this poem last night, and I have no idea what it's about. I just let my sub-conscious kinda eak out, cheesy as it may sound. Not really sure if it's good or not, doesn't really have a great particular meaning, but here's a short poem.

The Origin of Genesis
~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~

The origin of genesis
Came to me in a swift, cool dream
Black as night and thick with tall forest
Carrying the corpse in a haze of scattered thoughts

Relentless, curving
A desire, a lust, a passion for trips and blood
The slit wrist, the dire shaman, the wistful crucifix
My love is one, is your love, is under our will

The mysteries of the back lot street cult
The shamans and mystics
Pagans and celtics

The Thelemites unite under the stars
Alongside the dirty street and the deserted rusted out death cars
We have found the origin was meant only for thought
And not for answering.

Last edited by The Creature (2011-08-29 16:02:18)

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Jean, Jean, made a machine
Joe, Joe, made it go
Art, Art, cut a fart
and blew the whole damn thing apart.


Thank you.

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Ode to my pee pee.

I shall write a poem just as long as m

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The Darkness comes, the gloomy grey clouds appear
My emotions are overrun with floods of tears
For weeks it has stayed away
What makes it come back today?

A feeling so deep
it makes you want to weep
No matter how hard you sigh
You can't catch the reason why
It hurts so much more,when for a while it's been away
What makes it come back today?

Could it be a dream?
It makes you want to scream
"It's reality biting" and no matter how much you try not to say goodbye
You just want to die.

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He smiled at me with that  unfeeling smile
"It's really not that bad, there is nothing to fear." You can rest a while"
"It's quiet, it's still, it's dark"
"And if you wish you can still hear the song of a lark
What you keep in your mind, nothing can take away
here you cannot tell night from day."
"Just trust in me and listen to what i say."

" here there are no false smiles, that have no truth in the eyes".
"Your life is over, accept the defeat"
"For you can be sure death does not cheat"
" The book is closed, now you will no longer weep"
"Close your eyes and sleep the deep sleep"

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swollenguy wrote:
The Creature wrote:

I wrote some lyrics, roughly based around the movie "Cemetary man" and in Rob Zombie style.

I like it. The one line rejected by god seems a little out of place.

I changed the last word in that line to 'HELL', seems much more Rob Zombie that way.
Devil's Rejects.

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Long time have I admired you
Known for so much good
Now what am I to do
When ash is all
In this fall
That remains from the wood

Once a beacon so strong
Which made me so proud
Now I know I was wrong
You used the tools
To make us all fools
Now give me the grieving shroud

I must begin again
And I must awake
Nor can I preten'
To know how to recover
In this hour
To heal my heartbreak

Last edited by azathoth (2011-11-13 10:41:46)

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^ That's good, Az.
Though I know how disgusted you are about it. It's all grotesque, that things like that happen all around the world every day.

Last edited by The Creature (2011-11-13 11:02:14)

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^^
Good catch on the subject matter, Creature.

You know I'm emotional when the thing comes out that fast and I only have one problem with it  (preten').  Couldn't figure out that one any other way.  2 minutes on fixing that problem, 6 minutes total on the whole thing.

I'm only comfortable writing poetry when I'm feeling the emotion.  Otherwise it feels fake, at least to me.

Last edited by azathoth (2011-11-13 13:27:20)

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Wrote this for my baby cousin a few years ago.

Caleb
~~~~~~
In the real world
No one dies
Because it's all fabric stuffings
And teddy bear eyes
Everything is real
But you're an illusion
Pure destructive joy and confusion
If Superman can fly
Well then why can't I?

Touching and feeling
Living on carpet
Crawling through the open doorways
Pushing every button and turning every knob

What's behind those bright blue eyes?
Can you move that car with your mind?
I'm sure I could If I try.

If Superman can fly
Well then so can I

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azathoth wrote:

^^
Good catch on the subject matter, Creature.

You know I'm emotional when the thing comes out that fast and I only have one problem with it  (preten').  Couldn't figure out that one any other way.  2 minutes on fixing that problem, 6 minutes total on the whole thing.

I'm only comfortable writing poetry when I'm feeling the emotion.  Otherwise it feels fake, at least to me.

[edit- and would you believe I accidentally ripped off Tolkien in my rhyme scheme?  heh.]

Ah, and that's the best time to write, when you're feeling too much. Always makes for an interesting outcome on paper. And, for me anyway, good catharsis.

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The Creature wrote:

Wrote this for my baby cousin a few years ago.

Caleb

Very nice.   Reminds me of my sis's munchkins. big_smile

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this is so good! I love it

The Creature wrote:

Wrote this for my baby cousin a few years ago.

Caleb
~~~~~~
In the real world
No one dies
Because it's all fabric stuffings
And teddy bear eyes
Everything is real
But you're an illusion
Pure destructive joy and confusion
If Superman can fly
Well then why can't I?

Touching and feeling
Living on carpet
Crawling through the open doorways
Pushing every button and turning every knob

What's behind those bright blue eyes?
Can you move that car with your mind?
I'm sure I could If I try.

If Superman can fly
Well then so can I

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Thanks, guys. smile

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I haven't written a poem (or anything like it in a long time)  Tuesday morning I got the inspiration

Love Is Strength

Trying
to pay attention,
her teacher drones about what she isn't sure she stopped listening a while ago.

Daydreams
Take her to places unknown,
Her demons seem to disappear, her mind is quiet here.

Love
is written on her wrist,
A "Reminder" her best friend said when her permanent marker inked her skin that she is loved, that she is needed.

Her scars
visible through the ink,
love means nothing when the razor calls.

Strength
eludes her,
she knows she can beat this, knows she is stronger than the urge.

Maybe love
can be
her strength.

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revengebiteme wrote:

I haven't written a poem (or anything like it in a long time)  Tuesday morning I got the inspiration

Love Is Strength

Trying
to pay attention,
her teacher drones about what she isn't sure she stopped listening a while ago.

Daydreams
Take her to places unknown,
Her demons seem to disappear, her mind is quiet here.

Love
is written on her wrist,
A "Reminder" her best friend said when her permanent marker inked her skin that she is loved, that she is needed.

Her scars
visible through the ink,
love means nothing when the razor calls.

Strength
eludes her,
she knows she can beat this, knows she is stronger than the urge.

Maybe love
can be
her strength.

obviously inspired by recent events. love is a very strong emotion, perhaps the strongest one  there is.