Topic: The Wish Box.

Let me know what you think.

http://theswollencorpse.blogspot.com/20 … h-box.html

Re: The Wish Box.

Good story, swollen. It has a good flow and is quite true that most people are never truly content. Which makes it easy to relate to for your readers. I also think you did a great job on the wording being very descriptive of the characters, surroundings, and emotions.
One thing I would have liked more attention to was; "when Julie stepped into the box, did she get her wish?" I can guess what her wish was though. Best of all, IMO, was the ending!

keep up the good work and thanks for sharing!!

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you always have a good flow to your stories Sam, and it holds you most of the way but i am the opposite to the undies doggy. i didn't like the ending much, leaves everything up in the air. just my opinion. That said you are still a talented writer.

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Thanks guys!

It’s flash, so there is going to be stuff left for the imagination. I agree I should have added a little more on Julie and added some more suspense build up in the end.

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Got some great feedback/posted comments today on this one.

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Sweet story, Swollen. I thought it was really good, though I would also like to know a little more about Julie. Anyway, good job and keep writing! smile